Hola! I have changed my query letter a lot and I'm still working on it. Thank you to Wheelwriter for all of the help!!! Just wanna post my progress; it's still rough but I think it's much better. But Para, you are welcome to crush my dreams.
Taylor Williams had a plan that could allow him to successfully harbor his deadly secret. It wasn’t a great plan, but it was a plan nevertheless. Except it doesn’t quite hold when that feeble-minded poodle of a cop, Barbara, pries into his personal life, well, that was not part of the plan. And so the killings begin.
Detective John Harris scrambles for answers following the death of the SFPD’s beloved secretary, Barbara, while taking heat from his sadistic boss. But no answers seem to surface. And when John discovers a zodiac sign tattooed to Barbara’s forehead, he realizes that he is staring at a serial killer’s signature. Two deaths and two zodiac signs later, John is dumbfounded at the grace in which the murderer kills. And when a hair follicle materializes on in body in the morgue, John pursues the owner, unaware it’s all part of the killer’s game…
Now Taylor Williams has John right where he wants him and Taylor is enjoying every second of it. After deceiving John all of these years and planting some innocent scum’s hair on a dead body, he’s led John to the surprise of his life. And then, of course, the best part – his death.
Set in modern-day San Francisco, Down by the Bay (75,000 words) is a murder mystery told through several different points of view including the murderer’s.
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