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A beta reader told me to avoid using "as" whenever possible. He suggested I change A to B.
A. "Good Lord," the doctor muttered, quickening his pace as the butler followed closely behind.
B. “Good Lord,” the doctor muttered, quickening his pace, the butler following closely behind.
My question is, does this sound right? I've read it the A way for so long, I honestly can't tell anymore.
And when does "as" weaken a sentence?
A. "Good Lord," the doctor muttered, quickening his pace as the butler followed closely behind.
B. “Good Lord,” the doctor muttered, quickening his pace, the butler following closely behind.
My question is, does this sound right? I've read it the A way for so long, I honestly can't tell anymore.
And when does "as" weaken a sentence?