Teens Writing for Teens, the 5th

That bad?

Just some of the things I've commented on (and there are quite a few things that I didn't because we're not supposed to focus on surface things):
- Mixing up "are" and "our"
- Mixing up "they're" and "there" and "their"
- Switching between past and present tense in the same sentence
- Capitalizing words that should not be capitalized (like "parties")
- Mixing up "too" and "to"
- Misusing words
- Using "they" when it's supposed to be "the"
- Run-on sentences

Oh dear god. I am so, so sorry.

I know, right? I think I'm done critiquing for now...

I can't say I blame you. I'm used to reading papers that aren't exactly well-written, but that's...yuck.

Parametric said:

How did the 30+ full requests you received in the first 24 hours go? You must be well on your way to a thousand full requests now.

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Haha, well I'm close to 80 full requests and even more partials. I guess sometimes being a nervous reck does work. I have another agent who just emailed me back this afternoon who asked me to do a few specific revisions and resend my full to her again. So I guess I'm putting my WIP off to the side for a few weeks at the very least. I just can't seem to work on two separate manuscripts at once!

Lilly, could you post your query here? I'd be super interested in seeing it.

You guys, I am so excited to go away to uni in NY I can't even say. I wanna skip grade 10.

Also, I met my soul sister. Writes, loves HP, wants to go to the same uni as me. She promised to check this place out when she was done homework, so if the internet at home isn't back up when I get there, be nice guys XD

I am at Wendy's right now.

Thalia said:

Lilly, could you post your query here? I'd be super interested in seeing it.

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Same.

Hallo, lovelies! I just applied to six jobs including one at the Smithsonian! *happy dances*

Hey guys. Wait what? 30 fulls in a day? Um...are you sure?

I hope you get the Smithsonian job Because. That would be sweet.

Thanks! I hope so too. hee.

And now see that it will be nearly impossible to have 16 hours of school, 11 hours at work, two clubs, and find time to write. So I'm going to wait and see how my first job fits into everything before I join anything.

Hi guys.

Hey Ari. Good day?

Interesting day. I've prettymuch been buried in Weeping for all of it.

I wish I could be working on something other than Algebra homework ugh lol.

It's probably not the best idea, but I've given up on homework for the day and am now lost in Pottermore.

That seems like a perfect idea to me.

That sucks, Kidd. But Pottermore is better.

And apparently I'm doing the Glee arrange of Endless Love as karaoke with a friend of mine.

Dude! I love karaoke. We do it all the time at this clean little bar in town. Mostly Journey songs lol

I've never actually done karaoke. But we're talking about singing and he was like "ARI DO THIS SONG WITH ME".

It's a lot of fun when you know most of the people who are doing it. I have a good friend from Taiwan and she went with us one night and was like 'We aren't doing this...privately!?' lol

Hey guys, finally an free for a little bit from school work... scratch that i'm waiting till later in the week to do the school work...

Waiting is always nice, lol.

Anybody here? I just got back from lab.

Hello