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As a result of a recent discussion, I wanted to get an impression of what people think about this subject. Is poetry always best served in the present tense or active voice; is there reason or purpose to extend to passivity?
In the examples below, I've offered a few metric couplet alternatives to the same principle couplet. I would like to know which people think works best, which reads most naturally and ultimately whether voice, register and syntax can be as powerful a device in terms of relating or communicating a thought/concept as its figurative counterparts.
I believe register is important to poetry because it embodies the nature of the poet's voice, it adds spice and individuality to a poem in this sense and it allows for language to be natural and less stale. There are many who would disagree, but one of my fears with regards to poetry is that it is becoming more and more formulaic under the prevalence of style driven free verse as opposed to the actuality of freedom that free verse should represent.
If you'd like to suggest alternatives, go ahead -- or even discuss any other individual verse/couplet/quatrain/stanza.
In the examples below, I've offered a few metric couplet alternatives to the same principle couplet. I would like to know which people think works best, which reads most naturally and ultimately whether voice, register and syntax can be as powerful a device in terms of relating or communicating a thought/concept as its figurative counterparts.
I believe register is important to poetry because it embodies the nature of the poet's voice, it adds spice and individuality to a poem in this sense and it allows for language to be natural and less stale. There are many who would disagree, but one of my fears with regards to poetry is that it is becoming more and more formulaic under the prevalence of style driven free verse as opposed to the actuality of freedom that free verse should represent.
You may have been crowned the Queen of Sheba,
but I am the King of all I survey
You are crowned the Queen of Sheba;
I am king of all I survey
If you can be crowned the Queen of Sheba,
I will be the king of all I survey
You are Queen of Sheba;
I rule all I survey.
If you'd like to suggest alternatives, go ahead -- or even discuss any other individual verse/couplet/quatrain/stanza.
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