- Joined
- Dec 5, 2005
- Messages
- 311
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- The gap between dimensions
- Website
- nexusman.atspace.com
Anya Smith said:"I don't see why the Coalition allows these senso lodges to operate," Carlina said with distaste.
"What are you proposing they do? Start up the Death Chambers again? Forbid nano life-extension treatments for the poor? It keeps the addicts contained and off the streets."
"This isn't old Earth and we aren't overpopulated anymore. Whatever lame justifications they used to make four centuries back, there's no excuse now for letting people fry their brains in those damn chimera death-senso's."
"I never would have taken you for an anti-death campaigner, Carlina."
"I'm not! But rational people take suicide pills in hospitals, they don't grub about in cyber-slums."
James D. Macdonald said:Personally, I'd go with "Which one is 'right'?" he asked, and ignore it thereafter, because the publisher will change it to house style regardless of which you choose. Just be consistent.
ashnistrike said:MadScientistMatt: The correct format is whatever the person you are sending the synopsis to says is the correct format.
Yes, which is why I looked all over the Baen website for something other than "send us a synopsis." No luck.
Rambling said:I don't mind the sarcasm/argument approach, in small enough doses - ie.
Hum. That still sounds to me like "as you know, Bob" style dialogue, so it clunks in my ear. If background information can't be worked in any other way, I'd prefer a short but clear bit of authorial intrusion:Rambling said:I don't mind the sarcasm/argument approach, in small enough doses - ie.
"You are cleared to exit the shuttle," the computer announced.
He lifted the crash web and stood up. "We might find an illegal senso lodge near the hub with a senso-interface system," Eric said, knowing how much Carlina detested cyberslums and cyberspace addicts.
The chimera senso plays evolved from economic pressures in the past. Four centuries earlier, the World Government financed Death Chambers. They were later abolished, but low-income elderly citizens who practiced dying became addicted. Not much later, the chimera was invented, adding the dying of animals to the senso plays. Then the Venusians discovered the biocrystals and things evolved from bad to worse. Due to the emotive quality of biocrystals, the sensorium of the chimera is so intense that the human brain experiences a minor sensory overload each time. In defense, it starts shutting off certain areas, which causes the Alternate Reality Syndrome. And the maya-tappers, the illusion junkies, keep going back for more. That's what made the chimera so deadly.
And that was why Carlita hated them. "Yeah, well, you might find it," she said. "I'd rather not bump into maya-tappers." Her eyes flashed and her lips tightened, but then she turned away.
"Lead the way then." Eric felt a mixture of relief and shame.
"The Phoenix docks at port eighty-seven," Carlina said and stepped onto the dock.
James D. Macdonald said:I'm going to be doing a live chat here tonight at 9:00 pm EDT.
http://www.starchat.net/chat/?chan=absolutewrite
The channel is #absolutewrite
Anya Smith said:Shucks, we have a dinner party at friends house. I always miss the good stuff.
Uncle James, "The Apocalypse Door" was very good. Thanks for a good read.
What, and yer gonna keep it to yerself?DamaNegra said:YayI got the transcript.