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This is a fantasy world.
My MC is a sailor in her early twenties; her younger brother died a couple of years ago when the ship he was on sank. He was relocating and so had brought everything he owned with him -- nothing survived the wreck.
My MC and her brother were very close, but in the first-draft she owns nothing that reminds her of him -- nothing that was his, no gifts he may have given her. I'm rewriting it and it doesn't feel like there's any... symbolic space left over for a treasured memento. But wouldn't she have something? They were poor, and he had no income (she's the one who bought him gifts), but couldn't he have made her something? Or bought something secondhand?
Gah... They were so close, it just feels like if she did have a memento it would take over the entire mind-space of the story. His death had a huge impact on her life and shaped the person she's become. I didn't make a conscious choice to not give her something (which is what bothers me), it just never came up.
Does she need a memento? Would it be realistic if she didn't have one? I could always use that fact to emphasize just how wrong her life's been going. But would that make sense? Or am I just flailing? *flails*
Also, I've been away from AW for about a month, and it feels soooo good to be back.
My MC is a sailor in her early twenties; her younger brother died a couple of years ago when the ship he was on sank. He was relocating and so had brought everything he owned with him -- nothing survived the wreck.
My MC and her brother were very close, but in the first-draft she owns nothing that reminds her of him -- nothing that was his, no gifts he may have given her. I'm rewriting it and it doesn't feel like there's any... symbolic space left over for a treasured memento. But wouldn't she have something? They were poor, and he had no income (she's the one who bought him gifts), but couldn't he have made her something? Or bought something secondhand?
Gah... They were so close, it just feels like if she did have a memento it would take over the entire mind-space of the story. His death had a huge impact on her life and shaped the person she's become. I didn't make a conscious choice to not give her something (which is what bothers me), it just never came up.
Does she need a memento? Would it be realistic if she didn't have one? I could always use that fact to emphasize just how wrong her life's been going. But would that make sense? Or am I just flailing? *flails*
Also, I've been away from AW for about a month, and it feels soooo good to be back.