Her heart simply does too many things. In the first 5,000 words alone, her heart leaps (for excitement), sinks (for disappointment), batters wildly against her chest (she's being kissed), and plummets (in terrible shock and disappointment). She also experiences a heart-wrenching rush of anguish, promises she'll miss someone with all her heart, speaks of sweethearts, and hears a song sung that mentions--you guessed it--hearts.
Phew. Hopefully her maltreated heart can survive until the end of the novel.
But most of the hearts could be replaced by something else, something synonymous, something that involved other parts of her body or even just a full-out tell instead of a show. There are other ways to express emotions than with the organ that pumps around your blood--but honestly, at the moment I'm drained from a long week of work (and the prospect of a busy weekend) and can't think of too many. Anyone want to help?
Phew. Hopefully her maltreated heart can survive until the end of the novel.
But most of the hearts could be replaced by something else, something synonymous, something that involved other parts of her body or even just a full-out tell instead of a show. There are other ways to express emotions than with the organ that pumps around your blood--but honestly, at the moment I'm drained from a long week of work (and the prospect of a busy weekend) and can't think of too many. Anyone want to help?