Thanks, Stacia, I really appreciate the time you've taken to reply to me, and I'll certainly check out your blog.
Before I get into my reply, I think now might be a good time to clear up a couple of things people seem to have got the wrong end of the stick about.
I'm not shy about writing sex scenes. I've written, read, and critiqued a fair amount of erotica. My cousin (male) writes erotica for online magazines and I help him out a lot with the 'woman's perspective' when I think he's made his female characters' attitudes seem too male. He has also helped me get into my MMC's head when it comes to his attitude towards the FMC. But I can't just rely on one source, especially when he is nothing like my MC's character.
The problem I'm having is not about how to write a sex scene, but how to get into my male character's head in a sex scene. I am perfectly comfortable in his head in any other situation, but when it comes to sex, I just naturally revert to default POV, which is female. I gotta break out of that comfort zone somehow.
But let's be honest here. To some extent, you ARE writing a wish-fulfillment fantasy, if you're writing a sex scene intended to arouse your reader as well as advancing story, plot, and character. Nobody is turned on by reading a sex scene from the POV of a selfish dick who might just as well be fucking a bowlful of mud.
I actually snorted like a pig at that. Twas not very sexy of me
ok, this basically comes down to the question: why am I writing this sex scene?
I've asked myself this numerous times. In the beginning, it was purely down to reader demand - the first draft of the old (historical romance) version of the story did a 'fade to black', and test audiences moaned. So, I turned the lights back on and showed the lot - from her POV. They loved it.
Now, in the (historical crime with romance subplot) rewrite, I have to ask myself whether this scene is still appropiate. If it stays, it has to do something more than just serve the romance plot. It has to work for crime story too, so it has to have some kind of justification in the main plot.
This is why I'm thinking about switching it to my male MC's POV, because he's the one who this all affects in the main plot. His feelings for her are clouding his judgement, causing him to neglect important priorities and piss off some people he really doesn't want to piss off. Sleeping with her was supposed to 'get it out of his system', or as his brother in law says: [FONT="]“You’re thinking with your prick. Go upstairs and fuck her and then rethink things with a clear head tomorrow.”[/FONT]
Problem is, he doesn't just end up fucking her - he makes love to her. I don't think he even realises that's what he's doing at the time, because he refuses to admit it to himself, but that's what he does. So, my purpose in keeping the sex scene now is to show that.
Ok, that was probably a bit rambly and off the point, but I just made a pretty important decision there, I think. Sometimes we don't know what we're doing or why until we try to explain it to someone else
Part of your job as a writer is to imagine things you haven't experienced and remember things you have. Were you never naive or inexperienced?
Er... probably best we don't go there. I haven't been sexually inexperienced for as long as I can remember. And I can remember back to when I was 4.
Have you never been to bed the first time with someone and really wanted it to go well, never hoped that as he touched you he was thinking things like "Wow, she is gorgeous," or "I can't believe she's letting me do this?"
To be honest, I'm usually thinking in terms of what I
don't want him to think... or notice... or make fun of...
So, although I appreciate the tip, this probably means that your technique - imaging things I want a guy to be thinking - isn't going to work for me.
Men do actually think these things. It's only brainless wish-fulfillment fantasy if you have a character with a single-digit IQ who speaks in monosyllabic grunts thinking things like "My god, this exquisite flower is transporting me on a sea of transcendent delight with her ravishing delectable flesh." That's not believable. An average guy thinking "Shit, this is awesome" is believable. An average guy bedding an inexperienced virgin and thinking "Go slow, you don't want to hurt her," is also believable.
Yeah, true. In the scene as it is written from her POV, it's obvious that he is being gentle and taking it slow, although she has no frame of reference to know that. Actually, her complete lack of understanding about what's supposed to happen and how it's supposed to feel made it more interesting to write.
I guess what might be most interesting from his perspective is him being anxious to know how she's feeling, paying attention to her reactions to make sure she's ok.
Men are not automatons. Men want to love and be loved just like women do. Men want their partners to enjoy the sex they're having just like women do; in fact, I would say that's an even bigger deal for men, since the onus is still more on men--seemingly, as in there seems to be more a belief that the man is in control of how good the experience is--to be good in bed, to make sure their partner is satisfied. Sometimes, even, men actually want sex to mean something; maybe not all the time, but I think it would be difficult to find a man capable of love who has never been with a woman and wanted it to be more than just a quick fuck.
Good point. Apart from her being a virgin, this is really the first time he's been that concerned for the woman's enjoyment, so I guess he'll be a bit anxious about his performance as well.
Plus, at the banquet he got pretty drunk, and he's only half sobered up, LOL
Hmmm, this is really making me think. Thanks.
You'd be missing out. One of my boyfriends was a virgin. That was pretty awesome. And I got to see firsthand how much at least one man wanted to learn, and wanted to please not just A woman, but HIS woman. How much that mattered.
Different strokes for different folk, lol!
Really? I'd think I was doing a good job putting myself into my character's head and POV, and understanding him, and conveying the scene through his eyes, the way a writer should.
Like I said, I was being a bit tongue in cheek with my lesbian comment. I've never been that way inclined, and I couldn't write F/F or M/M erotica because it does nothing for me, so yes, thinking myself into the man's perspective for a sex scene is very unfamiliar, and a little disconcerting. But this thread has given me lots of ideas, and the idea is getting a little less disconcerting all the time
Thanks Stacia, for your lengthy reply, and to everyone who has contributed to this thread. The wall may gradually be coming down