screenwriting critique partner

Since you haven't gotten any replies, you might send a PM to Derek (dpaterso), the moderator of the Scripts forum, and see if it would be okay to post a message in the Scripts forum itself with a link back to this thread.

The trouble with a post like yours is that it can quickly disappear off the new posts pages if no one replies and then it's missed by many people.

I know I'm not what you're looking for, but I'm suggesting this because it doesn't seem you're having much luck. I've never written a screenplay, but I've been a film and commercial actress since I was a teenager, so for over a decade. Suffice it to say, I've read a zillion scripts (indies for my own work, blockbusters from back when I was in the learning phase). I've also helped friends with aspects of their own screenplays, though usually along the hashing out plot points, which I'm decent at. I've read a few books on writing screenplays, but I don't have a film school background, not at all, and the gap in my film knowledge is embarrassing.

It just so happens that someone wants to make one of my short (horror, but not zombies) stories into an indie short, and I begged to take a crack at writing the screenplay. It's a fairly introspective story in some ways, and they want it externalized for obvious reasons. *Gulp* I'm going to be tackling that at the beginning of December.

Just a suggestion, but if you think it'd be helpful, I could give you the feedback I'm capable of (a focus on general story mechanics, character and dialogue). I could read yours nowish, and then you could take a look at my adaptation when I get it done?

If you are still looking for someone to read your script, I would be happy to do so. I'm new to this forum so let me provide you with my background.

I have written a full length feature. (Drama)
I have written and provided notes on approximately twenty different scripts of various genre's. While I haven't read a comedy script specifically, I still understand the fundamentals of screenwriting. If you would like to read any of the notes I've written in the past, you are welcome to do so. I think you will find that they are honest, detailed, and fair.

If you would like to trade scripts and read my drama, I would be interested in getting a woman's opinion on it to measure the emotional impact it currently has. I have received notes from one person so far. While I agree with his assessment, I would like to get a few more opinions before I begin my third rewrite.

If Bulletproof is already assisting, great! I just thought I would throw my hat into the ring if you still needed assistance.