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How do you format a dialogue if you want to put a (thought) comment from the POV character inside another character's speak line?
Can you put in the comment without making a new paragraph for it, like this?
"Why are you late?" I asked. "I've been waiting for over half an hour."
"It wasn't my fault, couldn't find my keys." Absent-minded Alex, it was probably an accomplishment that she had remembered to come at all. "Don't sulk, I'm here now, ain't I?"
Or would you have to make a new line as it isn't Alex thinking it?
"Why are you late?" I asked. "I've been waiting for over half an hour."
"It wasn't my fault, couldn't find my keys."
Absent-minded Alex, it was probably an accomplishment that she had remembered to come at all.
"Don't sulk, I'm here now, ain't I?"
Sorry for the dull examples, made it up for the question in general, sometimes you have character B speaking and you want to make a tiny input from the POV character to further explain B's personality or something the character B is speaking about. Would you have to make a new paragraph for every time you do it?
Can you put in the comment without making a new paragraph for it, like this?
"Why are you late?" I asked. "I've been waiting for over half an hour."
"It wasn't my fault, couldn't find my keys." Absent-minded Alex, it was probably an accomplishment that she had remembered to come at all. "Don't sulk, I'm here now, ain't I?"
Or would you have to make a new line as it isn't Alex thinking it?
"Why are you late?" I asked. "I've been waiting for over half an hour."
"It wasn't my fault, couldn't find my keys."
Absent-minded Alex, it was probably an accomplishment that she had remembered to come at all.
"Don't sulk, I'm here now, ain't I?"
Sorry for the dull examples, made it up for the question in general, sometimes you have character B speaking and you want to make a tiny input from the POV character to further explain B's personality or something the character B is speaking about. Would you have to make a new paragraph for every time you do it?