I need opinions on my story Hell and how to do chapter one.
I have two ways I can do it but I am not sure so I want the opinions of you guys
Basically there are two ways to draw the readers into wanting to know the mystery of what happened and what is going to happen.
Idea A:
Start of with a short narriation.
Before that night, my biggest fear was someone discovering I was gay and having a relationship with the most popular boy at our Private school.
After that night, that wasn't my biggest fear.
I feared for my life...and the lives of my family and friends.
Life changed for us in Harmony on 11/11/11 at 11:11 pm.
I remembered that i had been with Kyle that night. I had planned to lose my virginity but i wound up getting my heartbroken. The last words i remember before i blacked out were...I don't love you.
A young boy was ready to take his life...He stood in the room with the gun in his mouth, finger on the trigger...ready to blow his brains out right there on the floor...But he blacked out.
A group of boys were partying it up and drinking underage, heading home when they hit a young boy and proceeded to drive away without calling for help...as he laid dying and watching them leave...he blacked out...they blacked out.
The blackouts were all connected...and when we woke up, our parents...our teachers...the leaders were gone...Internet was not working....Phones were not working.
Life forever changed that night....and it was only the beginning.
This would be the prologue and then Chapter one will start telling the story of what happens when the characters awoke and how they handle everything.
This basically jumps right into the action but it doesn't give you a chance to really get to know the characters fully BEFORE the action happens(the supernatural pwoers and the social issues, and the creature)
OR
Idea B
No prologue
A chapter needs a beginning, middle, and end(ABC FORMAT)
Instead i'd start the chapter with CAB fomat(End, Beginning, Middle)
SO i'd start Chapter one with the Ending--- this would make the reader want to know how and why the hell this happened.
I.e. The Chapter would begin with the characters awaking from the blackout....discovering the horror of their family being missing
The middle of the chapter would actually be the beginning aka the present(What the characters were doing PRIOR to the Blackout...I.e. the suidal character was considering how he was goign to kill himself)
and the end of the chapter would be the middle of the chapter(basically leading into the eclipse and the blackouts, thus explaining what happened in the beginning of the chapter).
This basically allows you to Get to know the characters however this could potentially be harder to grasp the readers attention in the first chapter because I am spending the chapter setting up introductions for the characters and action doesn't appear until towards the end of the chapter.
So which do you guys like?
Idea A or Idea B?
and any suggestions for whichever one you like?
And if you have a different suggestion as to how to start the story off, then
by all means let me know.