Teens Writing for Teens, the 5th

The Kidd said:

I can think of why it would tickle me. Because NO ONE says fancy here lol and I think it is kinda cute. We would just straight up say: "Hey I want to **** so-an-so" well. Where I'm from anyway. We tend to be very blunt here in the South.

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We say it in the context of "I feel like..." as well. Old fashioned, but I still say it in that context. XD

Hey Lisa! How goes it?

My problem is I have no idea if I'm adding too much trauma into my MC's life. Basically, my two characters, Kadin and Marcelle, are twins. When they were 16, their father committed suicide via shooting himself in the head in front of them.

Then when they are 21, they get into a really bad fight, so Marcelle kicks Kadin out of their apartment. And while Kadin is walking to his boyfriend's house he gets sexually and physically assaulted by these two thugs. This of course, also really affects Marcelle because she feels it's her fault. @_@;

Man, that's how we talk too. Very blunt and dirty. XD It's so bad ahaha. Then again, I have quite the potty mouth too. o.o;

I don't like 'Gold Digger' very much. :/

Keagan. As long as they are believably functional after the trauma then it is fine. It being believable or not would be based upon their personality. It should also influence their choices for the rest of the story. So-and-so may be afraid to be left alone at home by himself or to go to the store at night. Make it believable and it will be fine.

Another thing: Sex is like a handshake when you are at the college level here.

What Kidd said.

Dude. I just realized that one of my chairs at my dining table is different than the other two and that is why it hurts my butt. XD I just got mind humped.

Mind humped????

The proper term is mind ****ed but I try to be curt and not swear too much on the boards.

Like for example: The illusion was a total mind ****. -Or- When Sarah found out her History teacher was in fact her estranged father it was mind ****ingly obvious.

Oh.

I AM WRITING AGAIN!

Yay, Karla! Did that song help?

So many pages were added today. 0_0 I'm not reading them all. hehe.

Hey, Zoe.

Most of them were about blogs and twitter so don't feel bad Zoe lol.

Awesome Karla! I hope you get a ton of work finished today At the very least I hope you enjoy it.

All right, made my first Hermione banner. It's not bad, if I say so myself. Thoughts?

I'm working on...

A BOOK.

I want my Ron/Hermione one now. Also, check your FB.

No, I brainstormed a little and figured out what'll happen in the scene I was stuck on (even though it was a future scene...IDK why I couldn't write the scenes before it. BOO.) and also another jerk situation, the one where Joe blows his cover and hell is unleashed.

He doesn't get beaten up, does he? D:

Whoa. New posts.

Kidd - Thanks! I hope I get a lot done today too

Zoom - Me too!

Tally - It looks great!

ETA: Lisa - I hate to say it, but he deserves it.

Good, more conflict is good!

Was my feedback helpful Zoom?

That's what I say. If he gets beaten up it would be good for the story. If you want to go that far of course

Glee = pound the words out.

This is unexpected.

The Kidd said:

Was my feedback helpful Zoom?

That's what I say. If he gets beaten up it would be good for the story. If you want to go that far of course

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Cha, it was good.

I'm re-reading what I wrote, as I'm picking up a book I started and never finished.

Yes! More conflict is very good. And yeah, Kidd, I go even farther with Joe's revenge...

ETA: And it has to be farther considering it's the climax lol