Hello,
I am a newbie who wants to know how to write a good script. I have my first draft of my introduction completed (
download here) and I in all honesty like it but don't think it is of a good standard. I just want to know how to make the dialogue flow better and also anything else that you think is useful for me to know then please reply.
Thank you all in advance.
Nathan P.
Okay, I checked out just the first page of what you linked to and I can tell you this right off the bat:
There is a universal standard format for screenplays. There are many dedicated screenwriting programs that have that format already built in. Some you can buy. Some you can download for free.
I think there's a link somewhere on this site that can give you that info. If not, a web search can easily take you to that info.
You must learn and use standard format.
Second, a very common error that beginners engage in is what is known as "directing on the page" -- you're committing that crime big time.
Don't describe shots. Don't describe camera moves, except in the very rare circumstances where such things are essential for some critical story reason (say a camera move or something is going to conceal or reveal the identify of some key previously concealed character).
Otherwise, just describe what's happening and do it in a way that is both concise and vivid. The general rule is that no block of text should be much more than five lines long.
Draw us into the events of the story quickly. Involve us in what is happening. Don't start talking about cameras moving here, revealing this, you hear something off screen.
You want to give the reader the *impression* that he is watching the movie in his head -- but it is futile effort to attempt to overload a screenplay with "pan left, zoom in" kinds of descriptions in the hopes of micro-managing how the final image is going to appear on the screen.
All that accomplishes is to make for a difficult and a clumsy read.
So -- get the format down. No directing on the page. When you've done that, then you'll be in a better position to deal with your larger story and dialogue issues.
NMS