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I discovered this phrase in Self-Editing for Fiction Writers by Browne/King and keep coming across examples as I am editing.
Example:
She clutched onto his forearm in order for him to hear her pleas.
It's awful. I know.
I feel this is even borderline:
He flipped up the collar on his coat to shield himself from the wind.
Does anyone else have to catch themselves from explaining TOO much??
Example:
She clutched onto his forearm in order for him to hear her pleas.
It's awful. I know.
I feel this is even borderline:
He flipped up the collar on his coat to shield himself from the wind.
Does anyone else have to catch themselves from explaining TOO much??