Happy Thanksgiving JPG

Happy Thanksgiving!

Welcome to the AbsoluteWrite Water Cooler! Please read The Newbie Guide To Absolute Write

editing for authors ad

A publisher or agency using Google ads to solicit your novel probably isn't anyone you want to write for.


Go Back   Absolute Write Water Cooler > General Writing Interest > Blogging and Social Networking > AW Blog Reviews
Register FAQ Calendar Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 12-17-2007, 08:01 PM   #1
Uncarved
Just the Basic Facts
 
Uncarved's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: Georgia
Posts: 1,846
Uncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate compliments
Hit me with your best shot

Let me know how to improve, whats good, what sucks, etc, etc... I can take it...

Link in siggy, and thanks a bunch
__________________
~~~
About.com Radio Controlled Vehicles
Uncarved is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 12-19-2007, 06:02 AM   #2
L M Ashton
crazy spec fic writer
 
L M Ashton's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2005
Location: Johor Bahru, Malaysia
Posts: 4,912
L M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudgeL M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudgeL M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudgeL M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudgeL M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudgeL M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudgeL M Ashton is better than ice cream with hot fudge
Getting Confused and Coming Undone
vs.
Getting Confused and Coming All Undone
vs.
Confused and Undone <--- This is the one I like the most. Short, sweet, to the point. Getting and Coming don't really add anything to the title, in my opinion, so I would drop them.

Quote:
Completely random events in the life of me.
Doesn't have much punch. Sounds a bit too... vague? Hmm. Not the right word. I'll think on this. Wishy washy?

Your About Me section is way at the end of your left column. I'd put that at or near the top - it gives an immediate picture of who you are, and that helps to put the blog entries into context.

Quote:
Tina
I'm the author of A Georgia Native Plant Guide and over 600 articles. Currently I'm attempting to become a diligent blogger.
I'd be inclined to ditch the second sentence - it's wishy washy and doesn't. I would, however, be inclined to expand a bit on what type of writing you do if that's going to be a part of your blog entries. You've got over 600 articles. On what? What types of subjects? What areas are you an expert in?

For that matter, I'd like to know more about what your blog is about. I know you say random, but as a reader, I want to know what there is about your blog that'll keep me coming back. On the front page, there are only so many blog entries, and a reader will most likely only read the first page to see if there's anything to interest them. If there isn't, they won't be back if they're not aware that you also write on topic A or topic B or topic C, but those topics are off the front page. Make sense?

I'd suggest finding a way to summarize the basic premise behind the blog - what you mostly write about - and putting it in your About Me section perhaps.

You have a decent writing style. Good luck!
__________________


Laurie Ashton Farook

Instagram | Twitter | Facebook | Google+ | LinkedIn | Walking the World | Chilli & Chocolate


L M Ashton is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 01-02-2008, 07:48 PM   #3
Uncarved
Just the Basic Facts
 
Uncarved's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: Georgia
Posts: 1,846
Uncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate complimentsUncarved is so great that we've run out of appropriate compliments
Thanks, I'll get on those changes. I think its very wishywashy in tone, because at the time I didn't know if I would really be part of the blog process or not. The "Getting Confused and Coming all undone" is from a lyric that was the central reason for the blog, but you're right I shouldn't hold on to sentiment and make it more tight. Thats the only change that really bothers me.

Thanks again!
Tina
__________________
~~~
About.com Radio Controlled Vehicles
Uncarved is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump

Custom Search

If this site is helpful to you,
Please consider a voluntary subscription to defray ongoing expenses.

Buy Scrivener 2 for Mac OS X (Regular Licence)


All times are GMT +4.5. The time now is 03:41 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.