lmao...great examples.
She's totally right-the sentence should be reworked. I know what it is I'm want to say, obviously I didn't do a good job of it. I didn't get that across. It's a first draft, so I will definitely go back and tweak it. And you can be sure I'll scrutinize any "as" construction in the future.
I guess what shocked me is, well, it seems the more a writer's been around, the more you'll hear them say rules? Rules are great, but...
To have someone, esp an instructor, so categorically condemn something, was well, it was a moment. Thanks again, everyone.
She's totally right-the sentence should be reworked. I know what it is I'm want to say, obviously I didn't do a good job of it. I didn't get that across. It's a first draft, so I will definitely go back and tweak it. And you can be sure I'll scrutinize any "as" construction in the future.
I guess what shocked me is, well, it seems the more a writer's been around, the more you'll hear them say rules? Rules are great, but...
To have someone, esp an instructor, so categorically condemn something, was well, it was a moment. Thanks again, everyone.