I'm reading The Lies of Locke Lamora right now. It's entertaining so far, but I have to wonder about all the praise heaped upon this book. And about the editor.
The main annoyance is a wandering POV. It moves in and out of characters' heads. There is one scene in particular that is really bad about this.
This scene is told from the POV of Don Salvara, even going so far as to show his thoughts right there on the page. This is especially important in this scene because the MC (Locke Lamora) is in disguise and unknown to Salvara. So the entire scene has Locke described as his disguised character. Then, halfway through it, we get this line:
There are a bunch of other minor things that should have been caught as well, like:
I'm not giving up on it, though. I'm taking all the praise as a sign that the plot is going to be utterly amazing. I hope so.
The main annoyance is a wandering POV. It moves in and out of characters' heads. There is one scene in particular that is really bad about this.
This scene is told from the POV of Don Salvara, even going so far as to show his thoughts right there on the page. This is especially important in this scene because the MC (Locke Lamora) is in disguise and unknown to Salvara. So the entire scene has Locke described as his disguised character. Then, halfway through it, we get this line:
So now we are out of Salvara's head but still Locke is shown as only Salvara would see him. Confusing, to say the least.There was a wicked gleam in Don Salvara's eyes; it could be seen despite the brightness of the sun overhead.
There are a bunch of other minor things that should have been caught as well, like:
Really? Hose over his shoes? It could be the fashion I guess, but it seems like it would wear out awfully quickly.He wore embroidered gray hose over thick-heeled sharkskin shoes.
I'm not giving up on it, though. I'm taking all the praise as a sign that the plot is going to be utterly amazing. I hope so.
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