Man with twohanded sword
Emotions
Thanks! That's more or less what I have at the moment. The snag is that the hero is in a scene where things get progressively worse. If I write...
...then Peter begins to look like a loony, even more so because he's supposed to be an indomitable swordsman.
My approach at the moment is to use structures like this:
E.g.
I'm probably overthinking this, which is why I wondered what other people did.
Cheers
MWTHS
Thanks! That's more or less what I have at the moment. The snag is that the hero is in a scene where things get progressively worse. If I write...
A Bad Thing happened.
Peter felt the blood drain from his face. He tried X.
An Even Worse thing happened.
Peter's hands shook uncontrollably. He tried Y.
A Much Much Worse Thing happened.
...then Peter begins to look like a loony, even more so because he's supposed to be an indomitable swordsman.
My approach at the moment is to use structures like this:
Event.
Immediate response. Interpretion. Considered response.
Event...
E.g.
The ladder burst into flames.
Peter lept back and felt his mouth go dry. Now there was no escape, unless he risked using magic. Slowly, his fingers slid into his purse and sought the slither of chalk.
Tendrils of smoke rose from the planks under his feet...
..
I'm probably overthinking this, which is why I wondered what other people did.
Cheers
MWTHS