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    "What the Hell!?" shrieked John Lamely when finally, after having lived a particular sinful life, he was thrown in the fiery chasms of Tartarus.

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    Quote Originally Posted by JustinThorne View Post
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    This one here is my favourite. I laughed , props to you.

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    "Well that wasn't as fun as I expected," said Karl as he pulled his broken sword out of the muck, and wiped the blood from his face with the back of his hand.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Zazarok View Post
    This one here is my favourite. I laughed , props to you.
    Right, lots of new folks turning up around here, and that's fantastic!

    But, it's high time for a quick refresher in the rules.

    1) First lines only, that are clearly speculative in nature, to propel the narrative forward.

    2) Run-on sentences, and near-run-ons are frowned upon. Ergo, squeezing a few extra clauses in with a gratuitous semi-colon or em-dash is not quite right!

    3) This is not a chitchat thread, so if you have a post to comment on someone else's post, for instance, do include your entry. Like this...

    My entry:

    Ergodic literature had to be banned after the singularity when a book club's reading of "House of Leaves" drove the mental micromachinery insane.
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    Welcome to the game, newcomers! Sorry, ducky... I was trying to police the thread for a while when you seemed absent, but I got eaten by RL.

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    Fourth dimension travel was pivotal to the completion of this book, because it allowed me to travel to a time when I'd already written it.

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    Alfred Pembrook had never worked a day in his life, which was really saying something since a day on his home planet of Alpha Vega lasted 31 earth years.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Sai View Post
    Alfred Pembrook had never worked a day in his life, which was really saying something since a day on his home planet of Alpha Vega lasted 31 earth years.
    Actually that's not saying much at all. Now if a day took 31 earth minutes...

    In the spirit of my original post I'll retroactively correct the mistake.

    The botched teleport delivered Myrin to the inside of a massive tetrahedron, which was unfortunately home to three giant eagles.
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    Quote Originally Posted by pcw27 View Post
    Actually that's not saying much at all. Now if a day took 31 earth minutes...
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    I didn't stab him with my psyonic blade, he just walked into it.
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    Quote Originally Posted by pcw27 View Post
    Actually that's not saying much at all. Now if a day took 31 earth minutes...
    As unruly noted, even a reply to another post -- like this one I'm making now -- must include a first line. The rules of the game are listed not far above your post, where Ducky last reiterated them. If you do not wish to draw down anatine retribution (or at least, a polite chastisement), make sure to stick to them!

    Other than that, welcome to the game! Do play as often as you like, just make sure every post contains a first line. And on that note...


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    There's a method to the madness, you know. Minimizing the chitchattery makes it very easy for anyone to join into the thread, without having to spend days scouring over the past to figure out what people are referencing.

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    Quote Originally Posted by unruley700 View Post
    I didn't stab him with my psyonic blade, he just walked into it.
    This is a comma splice. See, two independent clauses joined only by a comma?

    That's a run-on sentence, textbook. Let's fix this, shall we?

    "I didn't stab him with my psyonic blade because he walked into it."

    inelegant, true, and in fiction, I would suggest making these two independent clauses two sentences.

    Does this make sense, people?

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    Quote Originally Posted by badducky View Post
    "I didn't stab him with my psyonic blade because he walked into it."

    Inelegant, true, and in fiction, I would suggest making these two independent clauses two sentences.
    Arguably, this is precisely the place a semicolon works /without/ cheating: "It wasn't as if I meant to stab him with my psionic blade; he walked into it on his own."

    It's still clumsy, yes, but it's connecting the two clauses in a legitimate way. Still, the semicolon road is a treacherous path to tread, and you might slip and tumble into less-legitimate uses.

    Oh... right. First line.


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    Commander Evanston abandoned us on this desolate planet without arms or ammunition, that is true, but he did leave one piece of advice that would prove invaluable: Forget the past.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Kittenmay View Post
    "The spy smirked, self-satisfied. “Deniam, so easy to fool.” "
    Welcome to the game! However, this particular entry doesn't quite fit with the rules:

    1. Every post must contain a first line, even when replying to another post (as I am here).
    2. The first line must be one sentence. No more, no less. No making long garden-path sentences haphazardly glued together with semicolons; you will be caught and suffer the correction of the Duck-Master of the Game (badducky).
    3. The line must be clearly one that opens a science-fiction or fantasy story. Dragons, robots, space travel, time travel, there must be some element of the fantastic to it.


    Something more like:


    My day took a sharp left turn towards the surreal when the target sat up, cursing under his breath as he stuck a finger into the hole I'd blown in his head.

    ...works. A spy isn't necessarily speculative or fantastic in nature. An unkillable immortal spy? A bit more speculative!

    Hope that helps. And again, welcome to the game!

    (ducky et al, the example given above is my first line for this entry!)
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