This is a very disturbing email I got today:
thanks for letting me review the first twenty pages of your screenplay.
Before I offer my commentary and recommendation, let me detail my
background so you will feel confident in what I have to say.
As you know I am the owner and operator of The Gary-Paul Agency which is a Signatory Agency of the WGAe. I am its content agent and editor and have been for over fifteen years. In addition, I guest lecture and teach screewriting and film production at several universities here in Connecticut, namely Yale and Wesleyan. I have written several award winning films and was nominated for an Emmy in 2005. I also work as a film producer and cinematographer. See: www.nutmegpictures.com for my latest film project.
GOOD NEWS AND BAD NEWS
BAD NEWS : (
Without going into complex detail about story paradigm and format, I found your screenplay somewhat flawed. Not to worry, this is typical of unproduced writers, it makes sense. Your screen-story works, yet the execution of that screen-story into a produceable screenplay is in need of editing. This is a consistent issue with hobbyists or those writers who are "trying out" this form of visual communication. The up-shot to all this is that your screenplay is in the first draft status.
Again, your screen-story is functional but the execution of that story into a produceable example of cinematic writing is not. Again, this is typical of most unproduced screenwriters.
Here is an important stat that may make you feel better: on average, any screenwriter who has had a movie produced has written at least fifteen screenplays.
Feel better? maybe not.....maybe the next paragraph will help.
GOOD NEWS : )
I believe your story is sound enough to offer you representation!
TWO CHOICES OF REPRESENTATION
If you choose Indirect Promotion I can rep your screenplay and place a paragraph on my agency's web site's Script Resource page. When in review, producers and development executives can read your paragraph and request your screenplay. However, your screenplay will be listed in FIRST DRAFT STATUS. In this offering you can send out query letters on your own using the agency's name as validation for representation. If there is a response, I can send out your screenplay. There is a $50.00 administration, coping, packaging delivery and mailing fee per script sent out.
Here you will be offered representation and an edit. Getting your screenplay into final draft status should be our goal and in working together through an edit we can reach that goal. The results from an edit are a much improved screenplay and a writing sample that is listed and promoted in FINAL DRAFT STATUS.
When you choose to have your screenplay play edited, together we will organize, a direct mailing campaign that solicits development executives and producers. It's more reasonable to aggressively promote a writer who has a strong understanding of cinematic writing then one who tells a good story but offers a screenplay that is underdeveloped.
If none of this interests you, HOLD ON, there is one other option which involves our company shooting your movie. Call for details.
There is no cost to you for Indirect Promotion and representation but there is a cost if you choose Direct Promotion. For $450 you get a complete read and unlimited phone time in the editing of your screenplay and there is no charge for follow-up calls. Also, free query letter
drafting and free management of your mass mailing campaign.
I'm sure you have questions and I have answers; nevertheless, let's get your paragraph on our web site ASAP.
Give me a call and I will explain the simple process.
Garret C. Maynard
The Gary-Paul Agency
In Business Since 1993