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Writing "She was embarrassed" is a typical case of telling rather than telling.
How does a character show embarrassment and that she is flustered, before rushing away?
For the POV character, I can include inner monologue as well as simply knowing how she feels.
My sketch of the scene:
She’s wearing heavy winter clothes; it was noted earlier that only her face shows. But she has taken off her gloves since.
BTW, in my document I use a rust-color for "sketch", basically just dumping the idea without developing the writing. It is more than an outline and may contain dialog that I keep, etc. It's essentially the innermost level of an outline.
How does a character show embarrassment and that she is flustered, before rushing away?
For the POV character, I can include inner monologue as well as simply knowing how she feels.
My sketch of the scene:
She’s wearing heavy winter clothes; it was noted earlier that only her face shows. But she has taken off her gloves since.
…but her arms reached up to his neck automatically and drew him into the kiss.
For a moment, her problems, the cold, her poor mood, all vanished and there was only that moment.
She let him go, and was suddenly embarrassed. “I have to go.” She took the empty pouch and made a bee-line for the door, and let herself out before he could open it for her.
For a moment, her problems, the cold, her poor mood, all vanished and there was only that moment.
She let him go, and was suddenly embarrassed. “I have to go.” She took the empty pouch and made a bee-line for the door, and let herself out before he could open it for her.
BTW, in my document I use a rust-color for "sketch", basically just dumping the idea without developing the writing. It is more than an outline and may contain dialog that I keep, etc. It's essentially the innermost level of an outline.
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