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Hi, all. I'd really appreciate some expert on an issue I'm having in my completed manuscript.
I've written an epic fantasy novel in third-person limited. There is a POV scene in the perspective of a secondary character, in which he meets the main characters for the first time.
The reader knows that the MCs' names are Dagra, Jalis and Oriken, but the POV character has been told that their names are Dagger, Chalice and the Orc King. POV character refers to them as such, and throughout the scene the narrative and the MCs' dialogue tags are Dagger, Chalice and the Orc King.
I've done it this way because, to the best of my knowledge, third-person limited dictates that we should write in what the scene character knows/thinks, not what the reader knows, regardless of whether they contradict one another.
My beta reader is suggesting that I should change the narrative mentions and dialogue tags of the three MCs to their actual names instead of the names presumed by the POV character. She says I should do this because the reader knows their real names.
My beta reader is also an author, but she writes only in omniscient so I'm hoping this is her lack of understanding of the mechanics of third-person limited, and that I can keep the presumed names in the narrative and dialogue tags.
Which of us is right?
For better clarification, here's a brief excerpt of the scene:
To the mods: I hope I've posted this in the right forum. Apologies if not. By all means move the post if it's better suited elsewhere.
I've written an epic fantasy novel in third-person limited. There is a POV scene in the perspective of a secondary character, in which he meets the main characters for the first time.
The reader knows that the MCs' names are Dagra, Jalis and Oriken, but the POV character has been told that their names are Dagger, Chalice and the Orc King. POV character refers to them as such, and throughout the scene the narrative and the MCs' dialogue tags are Dagger, Chalice and the Orc King.
I've done it this way because, to the best of my knowledge, third-person limited dictates that we should write in what the scene character knows/thinks, not what the reader knows, regardless of whether they contradict one another.
My beta reader is suggesting that I should change the narrative mentions and dialogue tags of the three MCs to their actual names instead of the names presumed by the POV character. She says I should do this because the reader knows their real names.
My beta reader is also an author, but she writes only in omniscient so I'm hoping this is her lack of understanding of the mechanics of third-person limited, and that I can keep the presumed names in the narrative and dialogue tags.
Which of us is right?
For better clarification, here's a brief excerpt of the scene:
“Deceivers as well as outlanders.” Wayland snorted. “I know your names.” He glanced to the short, bearded one. “Dagger.” Then behind to the woman. “Chalice!” he called, then turned back to the lofty one. “And you are the Orc King. Don’t look much like an orc to me. Nor a king. But what do I know? Your greatest folly was in venturing to this place.”
“Hey,” the Orc King said with a shrug. “You know the old saying. When from the Folly—”
“Not now, Oriken,” Chalice hissed.
“Hm. Oriken, is it? Fair enough. Can’t blame Demelza. She’s not so good with names. Now, I’m afraid you have to die.”
“You won’t pull off more than one shot before the rest of us rip you to shreds,” Dagger said. “You must know that.”
Wayland nodded. “And yet I have no choice.”
Oriken leaned forward. “There are always choices.”
“Why?” Dagger lowered his sword. “What have we ever done to you?”
Wayland’s heart was thudding in his chest. He’d hurt his fair share of men in the past. It was a part of village life. But he’d never killed a man, and the bearded fellowthat stood before him now, asking his question in earnest, was no mindless creature, not even a gobshite in need ofa painful lesson. These three were not animalsto be slain for meat and skin and bones. But if he were to let them go…
“You should never have ventured into the fell,” he told Dagger, training the arrow across to him. “Outsiders are not welcome here.”
To the mods: I hope I've posted this in the right forum. Apologies if not. By all means move the post if it's better suited elsewhere.
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