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Good morning! I've finished and am polishing my ms, and the members of my critique group have pointed out (frequently) that in today's world my MC would have a cell phone. That would frankly eliminate a good portion of the plot, while my little heroine struggles to solve her problems. There aren't many topical references in the story, nor dates mentioned.
I was thinking that in 2005 not every tween had a cell phone (particularly in a smaller town) so thought I would nestle my story there - but how do I establish that it's 2005 without being too heavy-handed? The family does listen to the news in the morning, how would this work:
"The television was on in the living room, playing the news broadcast. My parents liked to have the news on all the time, so it had been a background noise for as long as I could remember. The reporter said, “Welcome to the Channel 4 Newscast, The News You Can Use! Today is June 21, 2005. First, we'll have your weather forecast. We will have clear skies lasting through tomorrow evening, making perfect viewing for the SuperMoon!”
The SuperMoon is key to the story, and this news broadcast was already there, I just plugged in the date. Does it work?
Thanks for your help!
Cindy
I was thinking that in 2005 not every tween had a cell phone (particularly in a smaller town) so thought I would nestle my story there - but how do I establish that it's 2005 without being too heavy-handed? The family does listen to the news in the morning, how would this work:
"The television was on in the living room, playing the news broadcast. My parents liked to have the news on all the time, so it had been a background noise for as long as I could remember. The reporter said, “Welcome to the Channel 4 Newscast, The News You Can Use! Today is June 21, 2005. First, we'll have your weather forecast. We will have clear skies lasting through tomorrow evening, making perfect viewing for the SuperMoon!”
The SuperMoon is key to the story, and this news broadcast was already there, I just plugged in the date. Does it work?
Thanks for your help!
Cindy