So, for those intrepid souls who truly do wish to be great novelists, I propose an exercise:
- Take down your favorite novel, the novel that once you’d finished reading it you clasped to your chest almost prayerfully and thought, “Why oh why can’t I write like that?”
- Go through it and mark pages with post-it notes. It’s better if you also have a pen and notebook for note taking.
- Come back here and post a passage. Tell us how that passage made you feel, how it helped you to see the action and the world of the book, and how it helped you to know the character. Use the most descriptive language you can bring to bear to show how that novel affected you.
- My chosen passage is a long one, and there are a couple of subplots that get forwarded in it but are unimportant here, so I'll ellipse those out for your convenience.
The book is
Lavinia, by Ursula K. Le Guin. It's an exploration of the life of the wife of Aeneas, named in the
Aeneid but never given a word to say. (Very cool side note, Le Guin taught herself Latin in order to be able to translate the poem directly, as part of her research!)
The scene is of a sacrifice and augury made just before an important battle, and I chose it because it epitomizes what the book means most to me - it sings alive what it might have FELT like to live the ancient Roman religion, which as a modern pagan with ancient roots, I find myself always thirsty for.
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He nodded to the men who held the animals. They brought them forward, with the long sacrificial knives, and Latinus cut the sheep's throat while Aeneas cut the boar's, each with one quick experienced stroke. And at that the people, soldiers standing by and citizens up on the walls, broke the silence with a long, soft, quavering
aaahh of release, relief, fulfillment.
Now an Etruscan haruspex came forward to look at the entrails of the sacrifice, a matter the Etruscans consider very important; and the animals had to be cut up and the meat spitted and cooked over the fire. This all took a good deal of time.
...
The haruspex took forever poking about in the livers and hearts and kidneys, the attendants put too much meat on the fire at once and nearly put it out so that it had to be rebuilt to burn high, the murmur and mutter of talking grew louder through the ranks of the Italians. The sacred moment was lost, past. The sun was getting higher, the day was beginning to be hot.
People looked up and pointed to a faint clamor in the sky. A great flight of swans was coming from the river, heading south past us and the city; flying lazily, left to right. The Greek and Trojan troops followed the birds' flight as we Italians and Etruscans did. And so all saw the sudden eagle, arrow-fast from the east, seize the lead swan in its talons in a shower of feathers and shoot on in a wide curve over us, heavily carrying its prey. Then, most strangely, the whole flight of swans turned as one, flying low and fast, the shadow of their wings passing over us, chasing and driving and harrying the eagle, crowding it till it dropped the dead swan and flew up and off over the western hills. A hesitant cheer went up from some of the watchers, but most were silent, wondering at the meaning of the sign.