I just finished the first draft of a story I'm working on (you may have seen my earlier post about it) where a girl named Sparrow moves out to the country and befriends a forest god named Soren. He is on the brink of perishing due to losing all his followers throughout the years and being forgotten, and Sparrow's faith is the only thing keeping him alive. At the end of the story, Soren ends up perishing, but I'm having a hard time figuring out why he perishes. Originally, I wrote the ending so his shrine was destroyed (the last physical element of his memory) in a blast to make room for construction, causing him to fade at the end. However, I find this ending isn't really relevant to Sparrow's faith. I've dabbled with the idea of Soren trying to convince Sparrow that he's not real because he sees how their relationship is having a negative impact on her (an idea some people gave me here on the forum) but I find that if she suddenly forgets about him, her final goodbye with Soren won't be as poignant as I want her to feel the pain of loss after he fades. If she forgets about him, that can't happen.
What are your thoughts?
What are your thoughts?
