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World and I met empty Flowers

Justice & fairness Eisenhower's

Our vision’s get caught one person’s sight

What do we really see 2 faces eyes the night?

Not a sound of nature speaking

Like two hearts underworld sinking

But things go ☯𝓋𝑒𝓇 𝓉𝒽𝑒 𝓉💮𝓅 lips smile

I need this to last more than awhile

Bedroom eyes afternoon 𝑅𝒶𝒾𝓃𝒷💙𝓌
lips ice cream

Dream another dream it’s in our nature

Love is in the air hands to capture

Eyes melt & he spoons serendipity

Springtime lips flower show

Uptown girl "Big City" glow

Try hard to express heart-fully understands
Welcoming lending hand

Someone is beside you how he touched you

You felt secure he helped you


Addressing something of importance?

Perseverance more maintenance

Everything eyes resistance

Birds sing dance tribal

___________________________

Fresh diamond- cut global

Hands of love miraculous don’t give up

Falling for him he carried you way up?

Hearts falling down God have mercy

The ballerina dance swift recovery

Wings of heaven love discovery

________________________________

Lover’s vision Epcot entity,

Beaming with purity

Change of scenery difference.

Liberty of freedom deliverance

Re-birth visions of Love doves in flocks

Home modern high sky tech he knocks

On wood, you say I do He’s all mine

Peacocks spiritual wedding waving tail

Love Eyes coupled felt genuine real

Completely divine eyes? lips all mine
 

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The spacing between every line makes this read more like a shopping list of unrelated, random bits than a coherent poem; you might find it far less disruptive to try to maintain at least a loose stanza form? Also the silly, unreadable fonts are a huge distraction that throws me right out of trying to piece together something out of this.

I gather you're not posting this for crit, but I think you've got little building blocks of good things in this, but right now it's utterly lost in the awkwardness. You may want to try to restructure and clean it up a bit, take a bit more care with punctuation, and then when it's more coherent post it in the crit area for some more substantive feedback on the content/flow? There's potential here and it would be a missed opportunity to leave it as is.

Thanks for sharing. :)
 

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The fonts are definitely off-putting. Other than that, I think you would benefit from reading out loud. This lacks any kind of poetic rhythm. There's no melody or cohesion.