Quote Originally Posted by William Haskins View Post
interesting piece and some interesting choices.

line breaks could assist with pacing, perhaps, and you went a little nuts with your commas... but i enjoyed the read.

welcome to the forum.

new blood's worth its weight in gold around here.

I have recently realized my overuse of commas. Thanks for the feed back!
It just sounds very different in my mind, than how it's actually written.
I'll stray away from the commas for now