Cliche Watch 2017

JohnnyGottaKeyboard

Who let this guy in...?
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So, I've had my MC eyeing this other guy who was sent to act as a sort of bodyguard to him, but waited (about a third of the way into the story) for the bodyguard to get wounded (and be therefore a bit delirious) before hinting that he's noticed the attention. I think (of course, I think it!) it happens organically, but I'm worried this is a bit trite and/or convenient. Thoughts? Not sure what I'm asking. Maybe, "Would you groan and roll your eyes if you happened across this in a book?" :p

The genre is supernatural/horror/light romance/mild humor.