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Thread: A Shroud of Hours

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    A Shroud of Hours

    Time is a
    winding sheet,
    binding me
    body and mind
    to the worry,
    the hurry,
    the scurrying
    beasties that
    feast on the
    least of my
    dreams while
    lying in wait for
    the great ones.
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    Grand Duchess Ambrosia's Avatar
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    Yep. I relate. Good poem, William.
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    "The greater danger for most of us lies not in setting our aim too high and falling short; but in setting our aim too low, and achieving our mark."
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    I really liked the assonance running all the way through,great musicality and a pleasure to read aloud. I did find though that the 'Time is a winding sheet' metaphor brought up too many echoes for me from the Silver poets (Wyatt, Sidney, Ralegh) as well as Donne, Marvell and even Peter Gizzi! A powerful metaphor but with too long a history perhaps of literary associations.

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    thank you both for reading and commenting.
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    Thanks for ripping this one from the beasties - I've been letting them chew alot of my internal scenery lately too! I'll continue to enjoy this one of yours again and again, I'm sure.
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