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Hi, I am new and glad to be here. This is my sentence as is: "During a period in which the team was under particular pressure, not resting—even to catch my breath—became a habit of mine"
To clarify, this is intended as a positive statement, conveying the subject's utter determination.
That part I have in quotes above is fine as is, at least by my estimation. What I'd like to do is to add something to the sentence, more detail, but ideally still not break its flow.
Either:
1. Something about how this positive habit/practice/whatever persisted even after things got better
Or 2 (a new idea). Something about how it had an influence on my teammates doing likewise.
Thus making a pretty positive statement seem even more so. But I would just like the sentence to sound "writerly," if you will. As stated, I like what I have so far, but don't know how to expand on it with the two suggestions above and have it retain its flow. Thank you so much.
To clarify, this is intended as a positive statement, conveying the subject's utter determination.
That part I have in quotes above is fine as is, at least by my estimation. What I'd like to do is to add something to the sentence, more detail, but ideally still not break its flow.
Either:
1. Something about how this positive habit/practice/whatever persisted even after things got better
Or 2 (a new idea). Something about how it had an influence on my teammates doing likewise.
Thus making a pretty positive statement seem even more so. But I would just like the sentence to sound "writerly," if you will. As stated, I like what I have so far, but don't know how to expand on it with the two suggestions above and have it retain its flow. Thank you so much.