The Weaver

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The Weaver


Lithe hands glide over the loom,
weaving history into cloth, lost
but for the tapestry, the fabric
of memory, soft in her hands.

Tactile and warm, the scene unfolds,
stories told of bonds woven through
years of time and toil,
of loss and denial.

The trials of life laced between
fingers and beam, weft and warp
to conjure a tale of little weight
before the moment is spent.

Faster now, the shuttle flies
before a single thread pulls loose,
threatening to unravel the yarn
she spins, fingers hook the source.

Snip.
 
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sara,

this poem is a rich and rewarding experience. your central metaphor is timeless and lends itself well to the subtlety of motion that carries it along.

excellent craftsmanship in the s1 wordplay (lithe, glide... history, tapestry, memory); this evokes the music of the machinery.

the increasing pace from s3 to s4 ratchets up the intensity in a way that is both frenetic and deliberate, making for an appropriately abrupt landing with the one-word final line.

fascinating piece of work here.
 

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I was so excited to see you had posted a new poem, and the poem certainly doesn't disappoint. I knew by the title alone, and with some understanding of your poetic style that this would be a rich, full poem.
Excellent work.
 

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Thank you both, so much. I'm honored that you took the time to read and comment.
 

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Oh this is very good. The last stanza keeps bringing me back. Some aspects of memory are deliberate and preserving.
 

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Thank, J!

I like to write a poem for my protags, before I start a new book, to sort of solidify my ideas about them. My mother happened to share a video of a Korean weaver yesterday and the entire poem tumbled out of me before the 4 minute video was up.