I have a bit of an issue and I am looking for suggestions or references that might be helpful for me.
The problem is that I am writing a character who is immature for his age but from a first person perspective. I was hoping my last revision would help, but it didn't (or just barely) judging by the SYW post I just put up. People are still having the issue of a disconnect between the age given/shown and his actions/dialogue so it messes with all kinds of things. I feel like this is an odd case of showing something somehow failing, but I'm still a very new writer so maybe it is actually a failure of something else I don't recognize.
(I'm not fishing for more crits here, hopefully the issue is clear enough without needing to read it. If not, let me know, and I'll try to clarify.)
Does anyone know of first person books or shorts that do something like this succesfully, or have any suggestions that might help address it? I feel there are probably other cases where this could occur, like someone with a learning disability, or brain damaged, or a prodigy. I don't know if the issue in reverse would be there or not, but I know I've seen older people writing kids plenty of times as examples of what doesn't work in that case.
The problem is that I am writing a character who is immature for his age but from a first person perspective. I was hoping my last revision would help, but it didn't (or just barely) judging by the SYW post I just put up. People are still having the issue of a disconnect between the age given/shown and his actions/dialogue so it messes with all kinds of things. I feel like this is an odd case of showing something somehow failing, but I'm still a very new writer so maybe it is actually a failure of something else I don't recognize.
(I'm not fishing for more crits here, hopefully the issue is clear enough without needing to read it. If not, let me know, and I'll try to clarify.)
Does anyone know of first person books or shorts that do something like this succesfully, or have any suggestions that might help address it? I feel there are probably other cases where this could occur, like someone with a learning disability, or brain damaged, or a prodigy. I don't know if the issue in reverse would be there or not, but I know I've seen older people writing kids plenty of times as examples of what doesn't work in that case.