A semi-famous author offers his opinion on the ", then" sentence construction. What do you think of his examples?
He dims the lamp and opens the window, then pulls the body inside.
vs
He dims the lamp, opens the window, pulls the body inside.
or
He dims the lamp and opens the window. Then he pulls the body inside.
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I walked to the door and opened it, then turned back to her.
vs
When I got to the door, I turned back to her.
or
I went to the door and opened it. Then I turned back to her.
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http://www.fsgworkinprogress.com/2012/04/jonathan-franzen-comma-then/
I disagree with the above examples (he dislikes the first sentence, then rewrites it twice, and states he wouldn't read a book with any of the original constructions), but do agree with his first example shown below:
She lit a Camel Light, then dragged deeply.
vs
She lit a Camel Light and took a deep drag.
But I only agree because I don't think "dragged" is really a word and doesn't look right, but nothing to do with commas.
He seems to want a noun after the comma-then construction. So this is wrong:
I walked to the door and opened it, then turned back to her.
But this would be right ????
I walked to the door and opened it, then I turned back to her.
I'd say the second "I" is implied, so you can leave it out. But I'm not (semi) famous.
He dims the lamp and opens the window, then pulls the body inside.
vs
He dims the lamp, opens the window, pulls the body inside.
or
He dims the lamp and opens the window. Then he pulls the body inside.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I walked to the door and opened it, then turned back to her.
vs
When I got to the door, I turned back to her.
or
I went to the door and opened it. Then I turned back to her.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
http://www.fsgworkinprogress.com/2012/04/jonathan-franzen-comma-then/
I disagree with the above examples (he dislikes the first sentence, then rewrites it twice, and states he wouldn't read a book with any of the original constructions), but do agree with his first example shown below:
She lit a Camel Light, then dragged deeply.
vs
She lit a Camel Light and took a deep drag.
But I only agree because I don't think "dragged" is really a word and doesn't look right, but nothing to do with commas.
He seems to want a noun after the comma-then construction. So this is wrong:
I walked to the door and opened it, then turned back to her.
But this would be right ????
I walked to the door and opened it, then I turned back to her.
I'd say the second "I" is implied, so you can leave it out. But I'm not (semi) famous.