Recently a critique in SYW (not involving me or my work) mentioned the overuse of stage direction. That is, writing out the movements of characters to show what's happening.
I've found myself guilty of that sometimes, and often waver between "the reader needs to know that" and "the reader will pick up on that without me spelling it out."
I looked for some advice and found these online:
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I'm wondering if this is a common problem. Probably more so in the first draft, and then edited out. How do *you* decide what needs to be described, and what can be left out?
I've found myself guilty of that sometimes, and often waver between "the reader needs to know that" and "the reader will pick up on that without me spelling it out."
I looked for some advice and found these online:
Writer Nat Russo: When we’re writing our 1st draft, and we’re plowing through a scene, we’re often thinking of that individual scene in a linear fashion. X happens, then Y, then Z, etc. We’re thinking so logically about the order of events that it’s easy to make the mistake of adding stage directions. “Well, how can I just say Jim left if Jim is still sitting at the table?”
It’s easy. You type “Jim left”.
He suggests using direction for these reasons - a)Plot Advancement, b)Characterization, c)Suspense (one action is important to another), and d)Synchronizing POVs
http://www.erindorpress.com/2013/10/eliminate-unnecessary-stage-directions/
It’s easy. You type “Jim left”.
He suggests using direction for these reasons - a)Plot Advancement, b)Characterization, c)Suspense (one action is important to another), and d)Synchronizing POVs
http://www.erindorpress.com/2013/10/eliminate-unnecessary-stage-directions/
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Writer CG Blake: Is movement important to the scene? In the opening scene of my novel, the main character’s father storms out of the house. This means he has to walk through the kitchen, the dining room and the parlor, with his daughter walking behind hm and pleading with him not to go. The distance allowed me to heighten the tension. If he was at the front door and decided to walk out, the tension would have quickly dissipated.
https://cgblake.wordpress.com/2015/03/12/stage-directions-in-fiction-writing-where-is-the-mc/
https://cgblake.wordpress.com/2015/03/12/stage-directions-in-fiction-writing-where-is-the-mc/
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AWer Janice Hardy:Too much and it feels like the scene drags, describing every last little move a character makes. Too little and it feels like something was missed.
Let readers fill in the blanks
Skip the obvious
Flesh out whats not obvious
Add the character’s personality
Stage direction can be a pain to write, but it’s easier if you remember it can do more than just direct the action. Let it work for you, and it can be a useful tool to bringing your scenes to life.
http://blog.janicehardy.com/2015/02/finding-right-balance-with-your-stage.html
Let readers fill in the blanks
Skip the obvious
Flesh out whats not obvious
Add the character’s personality
Stage direction can be a pain to write, but it’s easier if you remember it can do more than just direct the action. Let it work for you, and it can be a useful tool to bringing your scenes to life.
http://blog.janicehardy.com/2015/02/finding-right-balance-with-your-stage.html
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Writer Katherine Cowley: http://www.katherinecowley.com/blog/action-beats-dialogue-beats-and-beat-variation/
Dialogue beats and action beats go hand in hand. Often characters use their bodies while speaking. Sometimes physical actions aren’t essential to the words characters are speaking, or can be left implied. At other times it’s useful to weave dialogue and action beats together, which allows them to build on each other.
An easy way to integrate dialogue and action beats is to use an action beat instead of a dialogue tag. For example,
“I didn’t want to,” said Lil. “It just happened.”
becomes
“I didn’t want to.” Lil dropped her cigarette on the pavement. “It just happened.”
http://www.katherinecowley.com/blog/action-beats-dialogue-beats-and-beat-variation/
Dialogue beats and action beats go hand in hand. Often characters use their bodies while speaking. Sometimes physical actions aren’t essential to the words characters are speaking, or can be left implied. At other times it’s useful to weave dialogue and action beats together, which allows them to build on each other.
An easy way to integrate dialogue and action beats is to use an action beat instead of a dialogue tag. For example,
“I didn’t want to,” said Lil. “It just happened.”
becomes
“I didn’t want to.” Lil dropped her cigarette on the pavement. “It just happened.”
http://www.katherinecowley.com/blog/action-beats-dialogue-beats-and-beat-variation/
I'm wondering if this is a common problem. Probably more so in the first draft, and then edited out. How do *you* decide what needs to be described, and what can be left out?