Booger

LOL I know it's a tad taboo to just out and say I love it, but, I love it. Normally I hate boogers. But a poem about boogers? Now, this I can get behind. Made me gag and laugh all at once. This would be great in a children's book- and I mean that as a compliment, not as criticism. It's like a twisted Shell Silverstein. Sort of reminds me of those more modern satirical plays on children's tales.

Do you want a critique as satirical as your poem or should I leave it there?

Funny - reminiscent of Jack Prelutsky. I think the "Siren's call" line seems forced; it doesn't fit as neatly as the others. Overall, the language appear - at first - overly economical. The rhythm that I associate with rhyme and whimsy is there; it feels like the last four lines in each stanza could be joined to make two lines in each case.

Then again, doing that might make the poem read a bit too singsong-y -- but that's a matter of taste. I can see a clear argument for leaving it as it is.

I wonder if amusing poems don't get the serious consideration that more sober or arty poems do. I seem to recall the phenomenon being referred to in other arts - I want to say it's called the Weird Al Effect, but a quick dash to Google tells me that's something different.

R.Barrows said:

*Shrug* What do you do with poetry?

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indeed.