Spot on, JAR.
Not to reiterate many posters here, but I'm firmly of the belief that less is more. Not bare bones like a script, but just enough to show the essential emotion to the reader. Let the reader's imagination work for them. As the writer, you're their guide. But don't take them by the hand and dictate each and every movement in the story.
Exactly. I think that an excessive reliance on facial expressions is often a symptom of the author's desire to make the reader see the scene EXACTLY the way they do, down to the very minute details of the image in their head. But no reader will ever see that image, and nor should you try to force them to. Give them enough info to create their own mental picture, but allow them to embroider some of the less important details.
When facial expressions and minor gestures (chills, shrugs, shifting feet) are overdone a book can read like a boring game of charades. I blame the advice "show don't tell" for tricking writers into thinking they can never say what a character is feeling, they must "show" it with yet another rolled pair of eyeballs, smirk, grimace or slight tilt of the head.
This is the other most common root cause. Some writers are afraid of telling, because they've been told that explaining is bad. Instead you must insinuate and suggest and illustrate every. little. thing. But sometimes it's alright to just flat out state something in bold. So instead of:
Colonel Malmesbury's face turned redder than a British cavalry officer's coat, as his iron brows met in a deep scowl, like two geriatric caterpillars mating in the middle of his forehead.
You could just say:
Colonel Malmesbury was royally fucked off.
It really depends on context
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