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So I'm revising my manuscript of 122k words total, and would really appreciate a beta-read of a random chapter for overall evaluation. Please feel free to ask for a non-sex chapter (everything blue is explicit). The chapters have an average of 3213 words. Here's the index:
- Curfew (page 2)
- Oren's left testicle (page 17)
[*]The bunny (page 26)
- When life gives you onion rings (page 35)
- Work Ethics (page 46)
- Wherein Nadir plays with Barbies (page 57)
- The cat needs a tree house (page 73)
- Goat milk season (page 85)
- Bottles, knives, dogs (91)
- Ameer (page 104)
- ...of doom (page 115)
- Jamal (page 122)
- Blood and tears (page 134)
- Cancer Dog (page 140)
- Bondage and pneumonia (page 147)
- White picket fence (page 160)
- Teddy Bear (page 170)
- Wherein Nadir kills Ed (page 179)
- Meat (page 195)
- Yucky (page 206)
- Crowbars and lorazepam (page 215)
- Tough love (page 231)
- Gauntlet (page 242)
- Addicts (page 251)
- Collateral damage (page 269)
- Mother (page 280)
- Caresses and casseroles (page 293)
- Scrubby in scrubs (page 302)
- A box of sadness (page 315)
- Nasreen (page 329)
- Ashes to ashes (page 346)
- Red lever (page 357)
- Uncle Khaleel (page 374)
- Dust to dust (page 383)
- Safety blanket (page 396)
- Spring fever (page 402)
- Rowan (page 417)
- Somewhere out there (page 433)
There's racism, murder, violence, strong language, rape, eating disorders, incest, suicide, substance abuse, and then some. The Bunny is not available as I'm changing it completely.
What I'm looking for, is commentary on grammar and syntax as English is only my 3rd language, continuity, pace, well basically, anything a reader might use the book as toilet paper for. I'd very much appreciate it and am offering to return the favor, any genre or degree of "objectionability". Thank you