I need some advice on the following sentence:
When Kate's body was wheeled out her room with the rain drumming the plastic sheet that covered her, whispers began to spread across the town.
Now the following changes have been suggested:
When Kate's body was wheeled out of her room with the rain drumming down on the plastic sheet that covered her, whispers began to spread throughout town.
I'm wondering if you would agree?
When Kate's body was wheeled out her room with the rain drumming the plastic sheet that covered her, whispers began to spread across the town.
Now the following changes have been suggested:
When Kate's body was wheeled out of her room with the rain drumming down on the plastic sheet that covered her, whispers began to spread throughout town.
I'm wondering if you would agree?