Writing a new story at the moment. I had an ending, I wrote the story out, revised it a few times, and some beta readers pointed out quite a few flaws. I decided to completely revise and now I've moved the previous ending to the middle, dropped some characters, added some characters, un-killed a character, etc.
Currently I have two alternate endings. I'm not sure which I like best, but I'd like to hear outsider opinions on each one. Here's the backstory leading up to the ending:
Now here's where the story breaks off into two possible endings:
Thank you!
Currently I have two alternate endings. I'm not sure which I like best, but I'd like to hear outsider opinions on each one. Here's the backstory leading up to the ending:
Frequently during his childhood, a young man had been told by his father that it's not good to express emotion at the "wrong time", which is defined in the story as basically anytime other than a tragedy. Due to this he becomes apathetic from that time forward, physically incapable of expressing sadness or anger. At the suggestion of a therapist he tries to trick his body into feeling again, but it doesn't work. He is disgruntled by the attempt, and resigns to being numb for the rest of his life.
Now here's where the story breaks off into two possible endings:
1. He contemplates suicide but wants to visit his father's grave before he goes. While at his father's grave he expresses his feelings, lays down and cries for a long time, then feels better the rest of his life since the emotions have been dealt with.
2. Story flashes forward to when he's a very old man. His health is failing and he wants to die, but for some reason there's something holding him back. He goes to his father's grave and expresses his feelings towards his father. Afterwards he collapses and sobs, then dies content at having expressed himself.
I'm personally leaning slightly towards #2, but I'd like to hear thoughts and opinions.2. Story flashes forward to when he's a very old man. His health is failing and he wants to die, but for some reason there's something holding him back. He goes to his father's grave and expresses his feelings towards his father. Afterwards he collapses and sobs, then dies content at having expressed himself.
Thank you!
