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View Poll Results: Does AW inspire you to write haikus about AW?

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  • Of course!

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  • I like cheese.

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  • Um, no.

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  • I still love Orlando Bloom.

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Thread: AW Haiku

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    How about movie quotes?

    Make yourself a damned quesa-dilla, Napoleon! --s6
    Last edited by shakeysix; 06-08-2015 at 06:53 AM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by shakeysix View Post
    Salty, Nutty, Sharp
    We'd best take our friend Nymtoc
    Sliced right off the block.
    She's the Haikupopotamus, her lyrics are bottomless!



    "We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams." Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

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    Laverne, she'll Laverne
    You, if you are that lucky.
    AW matriarch.
    Last edited by C.bronco; 06-10-2015 at 06:58 AM. Reason: Shakey Six inspired me. :)



    "We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams." Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

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    Daylily crosses:
    Such A Pretty Face X Sunset Buddy.
    Seedling UF, phone home.


    (In daylily breeding, "UF" stands for "unusual form".)

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    Orlando Bloom, sigh!
    Nobody misses you yet
    But I'm sure they will.



    "We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams." Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

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    This poll will close in approximately 40 minutes! The suspense! Will Orlando be redeemed? Will cheese make a comeback? Who knows!



    "We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams." Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

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    And now for the amazing recap:
    Shakeysix wins for Haiku honors, with Kylabelle in a close second! Equally significant was an equal number of respondents loving AW Haiku and saying, "Um, no." Cheese did sway the tide, however, which made AW Haiku favorable as opposed to neighsayers.

    Sadly, Orlando Bloom had no votes, which truly makes me sad in my heart.

    All in all, it was a good turnout!



    "We are the music makers, and we are the dreamers of dreams." Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

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    Orlando is hot
    Legalos is Sindarin
    Elvish ears not hot

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    Chile relleno

    Anaheim pepper
    slit lengthwise, stuffed with jack cheese:
    microwave at five.

    (PS--be sure to scrape all the seeds out before stuffing and pass the salsa please!)
    Last edited by shakeysix; 05-06-2016 at 06:27 PM.

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    Relleno dos--(Thanks to TAMaxwell)

    Be sure to scrape all
    the seeds out before stuffing
    Pass the salsa please!
    Last edited by shakeysix; 05-06-2016 at 07:24 PM.

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    Haiku structure

    I love Haiku that are Haiku. The problem with the Westernised version is that it's usually not anything more than a hollow, distorted misrepresentation. Often mistakenly seen as a simple poem, original Haiku hide several layers of complexity behind a deceptively simple facade. The final verse is intended to reveal a profound truth or poignant thought, while the first 2 lines intend to place 2 basic subjects in juxtaposition (commonly split by exclamation or punctuation, i.e. 'cutting'). The reveal is often an unusual observation of interaction, or the result of a comparison between the subjects.

    >subject one goes here<
    >and here the second subject<
    >insert profound truth<

    An alternative structure is to cut via the entire first line with an exclamation or supposition, and then lead to the reveal to show how subject 1 (now in line 2) affects subject 2 (final line).

    That said, I'm no purist--experimentation, breaking convention, these are important in poetry (but it is equally important to know what conventions are being bent/broken)--there are also those that believe the whole 5-7-5 concept is a misconception; indeed, it seems purely to be a self-imposed 'arithmetrical' element observed by English language Haiku-ists. Personally, I feel that limitation subtracts more from the form and its original intention than that it adds.

    Ancient valleys—
    glass and steel structures,
    myth nowhere between.

    It also saddens me that such a beautiful and meaningful art-form has been reduced in many cases to a medium for parody. It's a sorry, sorry thing to note that in our assimilation (better said appropriation) of such things, we tend to strip away most of what makes that something special. Yet we celebrate that... Sorry for being a party pooper
    Last edited by kborsden; 05-22-2016 at 10:05 PM.
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    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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    Farmhouse morning, doves.
    Amber bowl, ruby teacup,
    oatmeal box heirlooms.
    Last edited by shakeysix; 05-18-2016 at 03:42 AM.

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    Bayonet, butterfly
    Silver sage, massasauga
    Cimarron Crossing.

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    Rain drops tumble and drum:
    tears for sadness whether
    they hit the ground.
    Last edited by kborsden; 05-21-2016 at 01:41 AM.
    Kieran Borsden
    "to be born Welsh, is to be born--not with a silver spoon in your mouth, but with song in your heart, and poetry in your soul"



    -->Read Me


    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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    Wild lettuce threatens.
    Strawberries gone mad, grapevine,
    ladybug and me.
    Last edited by shakeysix; 05-21-2016 at 01:38 AM.

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    Arkansas: great bend.
    Cimarron: sand hills and sage.
    Ninnescah Big Foot?
    Last edited by shakeysix; 06-02-2016 at 05:29 AM.

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    I hope anyone may post haiku here...

    So that's how it works—
    The sound of opening buds
    awakens the bees
    Some of my previously published poems are now on PoemHunter CDSinex

    Clay is molded to make a vessel, but the utility of the vessel lies in the space where there is nothing. – Lao Tzu (c. 601~ 531 B.C.E.)

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    Wake up!
    Or mistake the morning dew
    for the crust in your eye.
    Kieran Borsden
    "to be born Welsh, is to be born--not with a silver spoon in your mouth, but with song in your heart, and poetry in your soul"



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    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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    Finding aye-dub was
    fortuitous. Like finding
    Truth. Or a penny.

    From SOULLESS:
    We weren’t there, in that cold, sterile hospital room on that hellishly hot day, to witness the death of Clara Tucker, beloved mother and cherished wife. We weren’t there to comfort her as she moaned in agony. We weren’t there, and she died without her breeze, without her beloved rosary or sweet yellow roses, without her loving husband and three young sons by her side. We weren’t there. We weren’t with her. God took her too fast.
    Tell me that’s a blessing and I’ll kick your goddamn ass.


    /kk's blog/

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    Spring not quite over—
    The meadow fills with fledglings
    testing their new wings.
    Last edited by CDSinex; 05-23-2016 at 06:03 AM.
    Some of my previously published poems are now on PoemHunter CDSinex

    Clay is molded to make a vessel, but the utility of the vessel lies in the space where there is nothing. – Lao Tzu (c. 601~ 531 B.C.E.)

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    New wings, nest weary:
    fledgling audacity wins.
    Jay shrieks, cat pounces.

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    shakey sips her tea;
    jay outrage rips tranquil yard!
    Broom whack! Baby safe.

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    Crooked, flap- soled, stained,
    Nine garden shoes by the door.
    Choose two--these will do.
    Last edited by shakeysix; 05-30-2016 at 05:45 PM.

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    Pasture poppy, white.
    Butter and eggs; cranesbill, red.
    Rusted pumper? Gold!
    Last edited by shakeysix; 06-02-2016 at 05:34 AM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by kborsden View Post
    there are also those that believe the whole 5-7-5 concept is a misconception; indeed, it seems purely to be a self-imposed 'arithmetrical' element observed by English language Haiku-ists. Personally, I feel that limitation subtracts more from the form and its original intention than that it adds.
    Plants grow where they may.
    Though a small pot be their home,
    with guidance, they bloom.

    Words grow where they may.
    Squeezed into western haiku,
    Five-seven-five works.
    "One of the hardest things to do, I think, is learn to trust your own creativity." - Ambrosia

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