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Thanks Mary Love, Derek, autumnleaf, and Ms.Pencila! Much appreciated.
Honestly, the three lines (and took Mary Love's advice in the process) I originally had were:
Someone knocked on the door. “Room service.”
"That must be my sandwich,” Ivan said. “Took them long enough."
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Problem is, that says absolutely nothing about anything! Hahahaha. So I tried to put some information there, ya' know? Like, a normal reaction would be that... but it would also be pretty non-informative.
I'll see what I can do. Thanks for the feedback!
Honestly, the three lines (and took Mary Love's advice in the process) I originally had were:
Someone knocked on the door. “Room service.”
"That must be my sandwich,” Ivan said. “Took them long enough."
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Problem is, that says absolutely nothing about anything! Hahahaha. So I tried to put some information there, ya' know? Like, a normal reaction would be that... but it would also be pretty non-informative.
I'll see what I can do. Thanks for the feedback!
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