Quote Originally Posted by tiddlywinks View Post
First, I love your title. I have no idea what it means, but you'd catch my eye with that alone.

I think you need to dig a little deeper into the meat here in order to set the hook for your story. There's a cool concept in here, but it's kinda buried under ok vague. The writing's sound. Just needs a little more...something.

Sorry, that's all I got.
Hahaha, thank you! I work full-time for a nonprofit dedicated to preserving and developing low-income housing, and as a result, we run into a LOT of Nimbyism (the "not in my backyard" people)

Basically, the premise is that Earth is no longer inhabitable, and humans need somewhere else to go. It's a story about a bunch of aliens saying the same stereotypical nymbism bullshit that I hear people say about low-income members of the community. So I just changed NIMBY to NOMP-- Not On My Planet!

Thank you for the feedback!! I'll try to find a different word for that 1st line