Chain, chain, chain, chain of haiku fools

the lion returns
settling to sample its kill,
ever watchful eye

ever watchful eye
over slowly sundered Earth
weeping quietly

weeping quietly
she never heard him return
ashamed; still in love

ashamed; still in love
will the man dare trust his heart
or trust religion?

or trust religion?
No, trust in the Lord Himself
truly trustworthy

truly trustworthy
would not describe him.
The politician smiled for the camera

Since some (Limey, you're not alone, don't worry) seem to be having some problems with the rules. I'll just repeat one shall I... What we're looking for here are haikus with the format: 5 syllable line, 7 syllable line, 5 syllable line.


Edit: like thus

politician smile (5)
hides many varied secrets (7)
in glittering whites (5)

truly trustworthy
behind the smile, it is said
is where the truth lies

Rivana said:

Since some (Limey, you're not alone, don't worry) seem to be having some problems with the rules. I'll just repeat one shall I... What we're looking for here are haikus with the format: 5 syllable line, 7 syllable line, 5 syllable line.


Edit: like thus

politician smile (5)
hides many varied secrets (7)
in glittering whites (5)

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Sorry. I'll now thrash myself as pennance.
OW! OW! OW! OW! OW!
Ouch! Ouch! Ouch! Ouch! Ouch! Ouch! Ouch!
OW! OW! OW! OW! OW!

Heh. No thrashing needed. Just thought you'd want to know so you could join the game for real. *offers a hug for the owies' sake*

***

is where the truth lies
somewhere in imperfection
a lie mistaken?

a lie mistaken?
I think not! Surely it is
a truth in disguise

Hope that's right...I'm gun-shy now.

a truth in disguise
lonely girl signs her letters
with x's and o's

with x's and o's
we played. Never losing once,
Never winning once

never winning once
she says that isn't the point
bingo's just for fun


By the way:

- Welcome, LimeyDawg!
- We've had the discussion around strict form: Bret, whom you'll see around, has lots of background on it. We generally stick to 5-7-5, but it's not a hard requirement. Me, I usually do use 5-7-5, maybe because I like the exercise of massaging my words to fit the rule.
- Having said that, everything I've seen of Rivana's so far makes me want to listen to what she says. I'm just faking along and hoping to get better.
- And thanks to both of you for revitalising and adding your fine works to this thread!

bingo's just for fun.
Presidents? No fun in them.
Each one a loser

Each one a loser
None of them reigns as winner
Until times falters.

Until time falters.
Until infinity's end
Timeless. Endless. Love

Timeless. Endless. Love
shines on through the clouds at night
as sweet Artemis

As sweet Artemis
whispers her song, I hold you.
A successful hunt

A successful hunt,
Another creature's life lost.
Killing allows life.

Killing allows life.
Disagree with the idea?
Ask the lioness

ask the lioness
who rules this bleak wilderness
as her young suckle

As her young suckle
Upon her maternal flesh,
Perhaps she will fade.

Perhaps she will fade
along the airwaves, her voice
sweet ever as now