Chain, chain, chain, chain of haiku fools

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The closing door slams
I hear the ending of love
then I see new life...
 

rich

What!!?? Nah, wasn't bad, DD.

But with haiku the last line is the surprise, or the twist, or the turning point. "Spring" isn't necessary, growth occurs when life is ready.
 

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ddgryphon said:
Green, proud, promising
as Spring flows throughout the grass
and sunlight flooding

rich said:
"Spring" isn't necessary, growth occurs when life is ready.

and sunlight flooding
growth occurs when life is ready
extraneous spring
 

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And I, believing
that bedsheet is parachute,
leap from the window
 

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"and fly like birdies!"
said the shepherd to the flock
here end the lemmings
 
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Life is like a grape.
Seemingly plucked once it is ripe
or stepped on by foot...


(How's that? Another spur of the moment deals... It's pretty fun writing Haikus... ^___^ )
 

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Haruko,

The idea of this one is to start your haiku with the last line of the previous one.
Want to try again?
 

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Oh... My bad! I'm so sorry. Please forgive me. I'll try again. Here:

Here end the lemmings,
staring face-to-face at Death.
Should one continue?


I apologize again for my momentary lapse in common sense AND for that horrible excuse of a Haiku I just typed... Sorry...
 

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Should one continue?
It seems this thread will not die.
I am not helping.
 

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I am not helping.
My anger and pride destroy
my neighbors and I.

((That one sucked... *slaps wrist* Bad, Haruko!))
 

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My neighbors and I
pass with a nod and hello -
our true thoughts concealed.
 

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The kissed cheek betrays
a lone tear randomly runs -
now, it leaves me too.
 

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now, it leaves me too
the dream of being lovely
hide from the mirror
 

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none else do I need
but I can't stop the wanting
I half-hope I'm caught
 

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I half-hope I'm caught
before I can carry out
my ill-conceived plans
 

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"I half-hope I am caught"
said the big fish in the pond
"I'd make him happy."



too late I see... I'll write another to follow Pat's


my ill-conceived plans
always get me in trouble
everything's half-baked
 
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Everything's half-baked
said the rasta on the beach
I'm out of ganja
 

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i'm out of ganja
and i dont have any beer
sounds like a blue's song