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So I've gotten better at showing when I do my work but it still feels bad. Can someone give me a site about to improve my showing when I write a story or give me an example. I want it to be better.

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On that note, which sounds better?

"It was raining"

or

"She stared into the darkness as another flash of lightning lit up the sky, her vision obscured by the raindrops hitting the window pane."

Bad example, I know, but it gets the point across.
 
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