Hi all. I need a few betas to critique a 7500 word horror short. The protag is a 15-year old, but it's definitely adult horror. No glittery vamps. No romance. It's strictly horror. Very strong language and violence. Any critiques will be appreciated: line edits, plot holes, anything and everything. Be blunt or nice, just give me the truth. In exchange, I'll read something of yours when needed.
There's an old excerpt (second draft) of it in the SYW Horror room, currently on page 4 (sorry, I don't know how to link it.)