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Last edited by wallowismel; 02-05-2014 at 04:53 AM.
In my opinion, the phrasing is quite readable if session gives its "s" to conflict to reflect the singular quality of "each." I don't think the semicolon works, as its chief function is to separate main clauses, and such isn't the case here. A colon would do a better job.
The format of each daily session consists of three parts: an informal lecture covering that day’s primary topic, followed by hands-on demos of key lecture concepts, and a breakout session for personal projects or group collaboration.
My edit would be as follows:
The format of each daily session consists of three parts: an informal lecture covering that day’s primary topic, hands-on demos of key lecture concepts, and a breakout session for personal projects or group collaboration.
Susan Littlefield's edit sounds good to me.
But I am wondering if you could do away with "The format of" at the beginning and simply start with "Each session consists of three parts."
Is it the format or the session that has three parts?
Agreed - it gets better and better as one reads each response.
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