Recently I've been writing something using a first person POV. I thought third, but I liked the idea of first because following the main character through the trials and tribulations at hand would maybe be more engaging. Maybe the reader would identify more with what's going on, if they feel as betrayed as the MC does.
Anyway, I find my words slipping from present to past and have a hard time distinguishing the line. When something's going on, but then a verb ends in 'ed'.. maybe I can dig up an example.
It's happening a lot, and I worry if it may hinder the entire reading process, or if this is something that isn't very important. Everything bolded in the following passage is what I mean. What do you think?
/desperation
Anyway, I find my words slipping from present to past and have a hard time distinguishing the line. When something's going on, but then a verb ends in 'ed'.. maybe I can dig up an example.
It's happening a lot, and I worry if it may hinder the entire reading process, or if this is something that isn't very important. Everything bolded in the following passage is what I mean. What do you think?
/desperation
My face felt hot, I can feel it burning in spite of the cool liquid that surrounds me. This was enough. With a strength that I wasn’t allowed to use outside the arena, I thrust my fist through my glass tube. The idea to escape cryogenic slumber seemed so futile; if they wanted they could easily apprehend us and pump us so full of Distrum we wouldn’t wake for a week. But now, something disturbed them, was rattling them to their core, and it urged me that now was the time.