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Thread: Radical Terza-Rima-Renga-O-Rama!!

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    Radical Terza-Rima-Renga-O-Rama!!

    If you’re reading this thread, it’s probably because the title made you go ‘hmmm’. So let’s break it down:

    Radical
    Adjective: (esp. of change or action) Relating to or affecting the fundamental nature of something; far-reaching or thorough.
    Noun: A person who advocates thorough or complete political or social reform.
    adjective. fundamental - drastic

    Terza Rima is an open verse form constructed from an indefinite number of three-line stanzas that makes use of interlocking rhyme thus: aba bcb cdc ded and so on. There is no pre-defined line measure or metre, but most English poets will use iambic/trochaic pentameter or hexameter.

    Renga is one genre of Japanese collaborative poetry, otherwise referred to as linked poetry or shared poetry. It will generally consists of at least two ‘ku’ (or stanzas) but can range up to many, many more. The first stanza of the traditional renga is known as the hokku and is what evolved into the modern haiku.

    The term ‘O-Rama’ usually implies a greater-than-usual number, volume, or variety of a specified thing and may also be used to form commercial names and other words for events and displays and spectacles.

    This is what I’m proposing:

    • a renga where the stanza form of choice is terza rima (including the interlocking rhyme scheme);
    • each post is done by a different (or returning) poet;
    • the first and third line of each new post rhyme with the second line of the previous post;
    • no requirement to follow theme (optional with extra shiny bonus rep-points if you do);
    • no set line measure, so go 5-7-5 or pentametric, or simply write lines of 6, or 8, or however many syllables whether uniform or not—the importance is on us making Terza Rima into Renga.


    Okay, so it’s not quite radical, and if no one gets involved, it won’t exactly be an ‘o-rama’ either, but let’s at least see where it goes

    As is customary, I’ll go first to illustrate:

    It dawned on me, not long after the setting sun,
    risen with the moon against the livid skyline:
    'Terza Rima Renga'—purest inspiration!


    Next Post has lines 1 and 3 rhyme with 'skyline' and a new rhyme for line 2. You go...
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    Do we use one of your lines in the next post?

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    Quote Originally Posted by ajc View Post
    Do we use one of your lines in the next post?
    No, you just have to make your first and third line rhyme with my second line,

    It dawned on me, not long after the setting sun,
    risen with the moon against the livid skyline:
    'Terza Rima Renga'—purest inspiration!
    and introduce a new rhyme for your second line. The poster after you rhymes their first and third line with your second line and introduces a new rhyme for their second and so on.

    My post is aba
    Your post is bcb
    After you the post is cdc
    etc etc etc...
    Kieran Borsden
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    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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    Following the travels of the heavens, supine,
    my own movements reduced to a rise and a fall,
    each blade of grass lifts me closer to the Divine.

    Thanks Kie, this might be fun.

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    I beat my head a hundred times against the wall,
    but never does the hollow thud
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    Kieran Borsden
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    It came about the number deux
    it sounded French I thought it did
    and yes it is two for deux
    ''as I gaze onto the stars, a light blushes pass through the skies, and comes to rest somewhere up far''----katian
    'read the writer, hear them sing!'
    'rien de perdu none de retrouve ainsi is la vie'
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    'the world must upgrade in mentality'

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    Last edited by kborsden; 02-11-2012 at 02:14 AM.
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    it surges from a sound afore
    it clips and swirls so quick oh lord
    tricky if feels it's easy amore
    ''as I gaze onto the stars, a light blushes pass through the skies, and comes to rest somewhere up far''----katian
    'read the writer, hear them sing!'
    'rien de perdu none de retrouve ainsi is la vie'
    'an adjective can sustain an enormous deal over a word, call in the neutral for a dash of normal'

    'the world must upgrade in mentality'

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    For every item I adored
    one has always been forgotten;
    forging me into the abhorred.
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    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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    Could it be the distant landscape is sealed
    within aspects of such lost horizons
    as the visions spaced beyond any field?
    Kieran Borsden
    "to be born Welsh, is to be born--not with a silver spoon in your mouth, but with song in your heart, and poetry in your soul"



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    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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    Here the east to western skyline still stuns
    beaten-up birds; blind to circular domes
    under heavenly paths every star runs.
    Last edited by Perscribo; 02-12-2012 at 06:40 AM. Reason: Changed l3 to flow a bit better.
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    it is so real it is right here
    it comes and goes just like a breeze
    it swings about joyfull all year
    ''as I gaze onto the stars, a light blushes pass through the skies, and comes to rest somewhere up far''----katian
    'read the writer, hear them sing!'
    'rien de perdu none de retrouve ainsi is la vie'
    'an adjective can sustain an enormous deal over a word, call in the neutral for a dash of normal'

    'the world must upgrade in mentality'

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    I hear well-versed actors speak with such ease
    the heartfelt words that a dead poet penned.
    Could someone read mine, before I die, please?
    Kieran Borsden
    "to be born Welsh, is to be born--not with a silver spoon in your mouth, but with song in your heart, and poetry in your soul"



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    I versus I, on the threaded line--twined
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    I've done too much to ever undo
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    Your fondue was gobbled and people paused
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    to divine chaos in your will were claused.
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    time goes pass fast, obliviant
    regardless of what you think or say
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    ''as I gaze onto the stars, a light blushes pass through the skies, and comes to rest somewhere up far''----katian
    'read the writer, hear them sing!'
    'rien de perdu none de retrouve ainsi is la vie'
    'an adjective can sustain an enormous deal over a word, call in the neutral for a dash of normal'

    'the world must upgrade in mentality'

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    The distance dressed in viridian shades
    is swallowed in the oncoming sunset,
    and graced by the wash of its coral haze
    Kieran Borsden
    "to be born Welsh, is to be born--not with a silver spoon in your mouth, but with song in your heart, and poetry in your soul"



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    Got to write an Englyn or 2

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