Teens Writing for Teens, the 5th
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I got notes back based on my proposal for my short story. Now I'm wondering:
a) Why I chose an enchanted forest as the seating
b) How I want the readers to feel at the end
c) Who is the story for
d) How dreams work in the Nutcracker
a) Why I chose an enchanted forest as the seating
b) How I want the readers to feel at the end
c) Who is the story for
d) How dreams work in the Nutcracker
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The proposal:
Ten year old Charlie has always wanted to meet Santa Claus, determined to prove to his older brother Liam that he does exist. On Christmas Eve, he has a dream that he is in an enchanted forest – but this isn’t just any enchanted forest. This is the enchanted forest where Santa’s elves live and make the toys that Santa Claus delivers to thousands of expectant children on Christmas Eve. When an elf, Jingles, tells Charlie that he can meet Santa, Charlie is obviously overjoyed, but is in for a surprise when Santa tells him that he can accompany him on his annual journey. After the journey, Santa gives him his Christmas presents before Charlie wakes up in his bedroom. Sure it was just a dream, he races downstairs to see if it was true and from the familiar packages under the tree, realises that it was.
Ten year old Charlie has always wanted to meet Santa Claus, determined to prove to his older brother Liam that he does exist. On Christmas Eve, he has a dream that he is in an enchanted forest – but this isn’t just any enchanted forest. This is the enchanted forest where Santa’s elves live and make the toys that Santa Claus delivers to thousands of expectant children on Christmas Eve. When an elf, Jingles, tells Charlie that he can meet Santa, Charlie is obviously overjoyed, but is in for a surprise when Santa tells him that he can accompany him on his annual journey. After the journey, Santa gives him his Christmas presents before Charlie wakes up in his bedroom. Sure it was just a dream, he races downstairs to see if it was true and from the familiar packages under the tree, realises that it was.
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Does the ending sound good? I'm wondering if I should change it? And what about the setting?
Hi Joelle, i'm going to guess your new here?
Is this your first time on this thread? If so welcome!
Is this your first time on this thread? If so welcome!
Oh well you can actually call me Ami, which is my first name. I used to come on here quite a bit on another account a few years ago, but I decided since it's been so long to start on a clean slate with a new account and all that. But anyway, nice to meet you!
Hi Ami! I'm Ally, dont know if we have ever talked from your other account or not. Welcome again then... Hummm dont know if i should ask you the three questions again but hey clean slate it is.
1) What do you write?
2) How old are you?
1) What do you write?
2) How old are you?
Hmm I don't recall, exactly, but I do have a pretty poor memory 
1. I write poetry, novels, short stories, and I recently decided to try out screenplays. Also, I've begun to dabble in children's books. As for genre, I tend to write fantasy and contemporary fiction. Mostly YA, a adult, some middle grade.
2. I'm 15
1. I write poetry, novels, short stories, and I recently decided to try out screenplays. Also, I've begun to dabble in children's books. As for genre, I tend to write fantasy and contemporary fiction. Mostly YA, a adult, some middle grade.
2. I'm 15
Okay so I came in and saw your last post, Ally, and my brain combined the two lines into "What are you?". I wondered for a moment if you were high until I realized I fail at reading.
Welcome, Ami! You can call me Ari
Welcome, Ami! You can call me Ari
Okay so I came in and saw your last post, Ally, and my brain combined the two lines into "What are you?". I wondered for a moment if you were high until I realized I fail at reading.
Welcome, Ami! You can call me Ari
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!
It wouldn't surprise me if i made an error like that... i dont need any substance to make me write like i'm high!
Wooohooooo! Congratulations
I never understand how on earth people manage 50,000wds in a month - so well done you!
I never understand how on earth people manage 50,000wds in a month - so well done you!
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